Reasponse post to essays

This is to Ashli:
Well Ashli, i can see why you would read this book and im not going to lie, the book seems really intresting. From what you wrote, i can see that there is so much you can get out of it. What I'm trying to say is that you can learn from it. I think that trhis book is a good example of how things can turn out if wether your successful or not.
As i read you rough draft, i noticed many things where you can add a lot more detail and where you can be more clear with what you said. I saw how you said that the personalities of the two sisters are different. But, my question is how do the differences of the two sister affect the theme of the story. But wait, you never explained what the theme and the conflict is. Theme and conflict is always good to have in book reviews. That way, you can say how the differences of the personalities of the two sisters either affect the conflict or how it causes a conflict. This is something that you should expand a lot more in your essay. That way when your doing your final essay, it will be very easy to undersatnd. : / = D


To Ivan:
I havent read the book that you read and i probably wouldnt want to read it because i can just see the movie. You really workeed hard on it becaue you explained a lot. But, not enough. what i look in in these essays is the themes and how they are developed. you can easily get the theme by just reading the summary of this book. But for those who havent read the book, add as much detail you can so that in the end the theme will come out. This is what i told Ashli. I think that i saw the conflict but thats one thing that i think that you should make more clear. what is the conflict.

To Elizabeth:
i can see how you enjoy reading Terry Pratchett books. Maybe I'll take into consideration of reading some of his books. to keep it simple. i think that you should explain a lot more about the characters and how they affect the theme of the sotry and the conflict.